Hello! I made new track. I've been making it over a month with breaks and made endless versions to make it better and better, but I don't think that help :D. So I'm asking you for feedback . Can be anything from composition, volume to mastering. Thank you

EDIT: I deleted the old version, newer version below

 

Last edited: Nov 4, 2017

I think u have done a great job ; it could be longer , other than that - i have no critique ..
it just needs a good movie scene ;)

 

maybe add some sub hits with some drums to add more drama no moving parts justs some hits. add some string staccato ostinatos for some texture. not that the piece NEEDS it, its very nice and lush as is. as far as what you have bring the velocity down on the intro violins they seem a little to harsh to my ear. and let that last crescendo ring just a tad bit longer before the piano outro and again maybe bring down the velocity on the outro violins. these are minor fixes all in all solid work you could def build off the end and make it longer, maybe make the middle section build up to a moving percussive part? alot you can do with it, but like i said it is solid as is.

 

Thank you for your ideas. I thought I could add some rolling drums. Is it better?

 

Great track, I agree with akashaman it could be longer, it's better with the drums as robbieeparker14 already said and I would highlight the end of the crescendo at 0:57 evem more with louder drums, an additional tubular bell hit and a recognizable crash hit.
Further more I think the low brass sound (horns) is a bit too loud, it doesn't really fit to the strings.
And again we like it we want more of it so make it longer, please .

 

Okay, so here I bring the final version. But I won't extend it because I don't even know how, it's finished in my head and I don't want it to be repetitive. Maybe next track

 

I love it.

The only argument i would have about it is how steep the automation is around the 50sec mark, i like the crescendo but it would sound more natural if the volume automation started a bit sooner to get some more seconds to rise, it feels too sudden. What daw are you using ? I feel like you dont have smooth automation slopes like Studio One (http://kellysmusic.ca/media/catalog...9433887a97daa66f/a/u/automation_curves_1_.png), it makes the process so much more natural imo.

Great composition though, my girlfriend is in the room and it just put them in a mood to listen to classical music.

 

I'm using Studio One, I have it like linear curve from bottom to top when it's rising. I didn't really notice that.

 

Ahhh, that's explaining it. You will need one that's more exponential like.

 

Studio One is simply awesome for orchestral composition