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  1. Ezpk22

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    Hey everyone!

    I'm releasing an album hopefully sometime this fall and was in need of constructive feedback.
    Any comments on arrangement/melodies/mixing whatever is appreciated!

    Thank you!

    Signs:
    https://instaud.io/2Qoa

    Rhythm of Us:
    https://instaud.io/2Qoj
     
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  3. No Avenger

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    Great work, really.

    I'd adjust the violins in Signs to the same perceived level, means raise the one on the right side.

    In Rhythm Of Us the main vocs are sometimes drowned a bit. Maybe use a vocal rider/leveler, 2dB more of compresssion, or automation.
     
  4. Ezpk22

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    Dope! Thank you! I can definitely agree with both of those points haha.
     
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    Nana Banana Producer

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    I really like these compositions. Very refreshing, and well composed. Definitely not a "me too" sound, which is very needed these days. Thank you for sharing, and I wish you great success with this project :)
     
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    Wow thank you so much! I really appreciate it, and I won't let you down! :)
     
  7. stevo7388

    stevo7388 Noisemaker

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    I loved it. Really good . The first 2 minutes hooked me in but it lacked a peak moment after that. Kinda just sailed along to the end. Signs Im talking about. Rhythm of Us was confusing until 1:25. then it felt cool. maybe start song at 3:40 and move from there. just my opinion. thankyou for your creativity. Really cool.
     
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    1st track, put more instrument at back, and the piano repeating too much, less variation, caused the fatigue
    2nd track, much better than 1st, and same problem as 1st, better instrumentation and sounding full, but too many same sequence repeating, you need to doing more harmony sequence and arranging considerations, boring, its a acoustic track, not edm
    (you need rework the mix, ok it not final version)
     
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    Really nice feel to Signs moosh, maybe you could clear a tiny bit more space for the vocal, it doesn't get "lost" at any time throughout but the edges get a bit blurry. But overall really nicely done.

    Rhythm of Us is an interesting mix of old and new influences brought together in a unique way......a bit Sufjan Stevens, Nick Drake and Crosby Stills Nash harmony? Luv it.
     
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    Rhythm of Us stands out like a real creation, I wouldn´t touch it no more. For Signs I would search for another piano sound, more brilliant, and the rain or whatever vinyl noise seems to me that doesn´t add nothing interesting to the song. The voice is very good, maybe a little compression shall reveal more nuances. Please don´t ask too much for opinions on your work, you´re on your own path.
     
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    I feel these fantastic songs and performances which I really enjoyed listening to, and will again and again by your generosity of allowing the downloading of these two wonderful pieces. I will surely share my enthusiasm with my friends so that they too will be the better for the listening to the both of them. I wish you full sails ahead with a potent wind at your back.
     
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    Soooo beautiful! Thanks for sharing ... Both songs are awesome... Kind of like a male enya meets early nineties sting... And I mean that as a deep complement...

    My only suggestion... Consider also making shorter edits (around 3 minutes)... It'll increase chances of getting airplay... Which these songs soundly deserve...

    Brilliant music writing and performance... Please share more...
     
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    Is it your voice? You have a great voice. If I produced you, I would be telling you things like "Sing it like you really mean it." Your vocals sound weak and half-hearted. The backing vocals on the first one can barely be heard - I think they would sound great as truly backing you. Listen to anyone who has used backing vocals, like Marley and they are just as prominent and clearly part of the song as the lead singer; your backing vocals sound, like you, half-hearted and really not there. Neither song gave me a good feeling, but YOUR voice has great potential.
     
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  14. Ezpk22

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    Such amazing advice!

    Wow! too kind :) Thank you!!

    Yes! I'm definitely still planning on re-tracking the vocals sometime soon! I sing to what comes naturally but I'll try harder to make it more emotional.

    Again, this helps a ton and I appreciate the time you all have given to listen and write out your opinions and advice, thank you!
     
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