New song, very welcome your opinion

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  1. Alfgw

    Alfgw Kapellmeister

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    Just finished my new song and really don’t know how good or bad I am doing.
    Your opinion is appreciated.


     
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  3. Ed Jachimowicz

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    It's not often that I can listen to this kind of track from start to finish, so having me do so is an achievement in itself (lol)
    I like the aggressive synth sound that, together with the sequencer, drives the song. On the other hand, it is there all the time with little additions to it. I believe they refer to this as ear candy which is therefore lacking in your track.
    The build-up (2/3 of the song) is not very powerful but that might be intentional.
    I like the syncopated rhythm on some parts of the song although I might want it maybe only underneath the vocals. So more restrained to a specific part of the song. As far as the vocals: I find the melody a little weak. And for some reason, the vocal part doesn't feel like the chorus of the song, which would be more logical to me.

    And there you have them: my 2 cents.......
     
  4. Alfgw

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    Thank you very much,I really appreciate your words,
     
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    Ŧยχøя Audiosexual

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    I'm also not into Electronic music, so take it with a pinch of salt but..

    I think there's many elements in the Center that compete for protagonism..

    While also not making/letting the Chords/Harmonic accompaniment be Present enough..

    Maybe try to create some space by using/panning drums and other elements differently,
    (Bass and BD are good in the Center, but you can be more free with Snare Cymbals/Hat Toms and other percs..)

    And surely try to put more substance into the Chords/Harmonic accompaniment..
    (and make them sound more on the Left and/or Right, not in the Center..)

    a Bird with beak and feet is a bird, but without Wings it won't fly too long!

    However I like the overall happy Creative mood of the track,
    and the solo/melodic parts with that morphing-like synth lead sounds.. it's enjoyable in creative/artistic terms

    It just needs better balance of the elements,
    and with practice it will get better, but I'd say you're on the right path.. :wink:
     
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  6. Alfgw

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    Yes, the same problems I had in other songs i did, I'm repeating the same mistake, I think I try to make it full and end it loosing a center of attention.

    Thank you very much.
     
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    Use visual meters that show if you've collapsed down to mono or how much you spread to stereo.

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