Hello my dear friends!

Just 2 days ago, I found a sample I had twisted about 2 years ago and this song happened. I know its not fully finished... could use a few more tweaks... specially with the vox... But, I lost patience and decided to go with what I have... so, here it is... hope you enjoy it... any and all feedback welcome!



Lyrics

Take a look at my bones
You don't wanna be alone
Look at what I have found
So I see you're one of those

We can make it more fun
Don't you look at my phone
Never fancy time
Doing the criminal dance alone

Don't you play with my clones
All the cards have been shown
Do you wanna sit down
Grab a hold of your beau

We can make it more fun
Don't you look at my phone
Never fancy time
Doing the criminal dance alone

You aint never gonna find love ... like that!

These are difficult times
Like the crazy 99
Yeah the point is getting moot
You're too big for your boots

We can make it more fun
Don't you look at my phone
Never fancy time
Doing the criminal dance alone

 

Hello @Kinghtsurfer
I enjoyed this song !
Great lyrics ! & vocals !
I like the transition between 1:19 to 1:36 & that gives the song a nice "contrast"
The "ad lib" ooh on 2:20 is so nice ! & the outro too !
Thanks for sharing !

 

@Spyfxmk2 ...thanks for the kind words! Glad you enjoyed it...

 

Hello ,Knightsurfer
Vocal tone is pretty cool, really apt for the lyrics and overall vibe. Great work mate.I like the overall roughness or "less produced feel".Really like the 1:19 to 1:27 stuff.

 

Thanks @Mat O

 

Hi
Well "played"! ;) Some familiar elements give that cozy feeling that catches you the first time. But OTOH your approach is modern and very personal. This could be appealing to a wider audience without being cliché. The structure is lovely.. great lyrics.. Looking for "constructive criticism", but I have nothing..;) Listened to it 4 times in a row and it was a pleasure. I indeed thought it was like 2 min long :D

Thank you for sharing, great work!

 

@TaxiDriver thanks very much... Am thrilled you like the song!

 

Many thanks to @ICWC , @vaiman , @Grok , @Backtired , @KungPaoFist and @wasgedn for the likes and the hearts!

 

Amazing,as usual @Kinghtsurfer.
You're the best on AS for the instrumental part for me,honestly!

 

good job! yes, from 1.19 to 1.36 is a very good "surprise" transition, love it!!!
and voice and ad libs to!
you have sensitivity!

 

@SquareDjay ... You are much too kind monsieur! your kind words mean a lot to me... Very confidence inspiring...

@flush with your foot ... Thanks very much... Am glad you liked it!

 

You did it? sounds very professional now you can sell this music

 

Thank you dear @Recoil ... You are very sweet!