ForePlay

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  1. incognito

    incognito Noisemaker

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    Hi guys,

    I'm working on my first song and I would love to hear some words of constructive criticism.
    I'm going into the studio next week for mixing and master so any input at this point would be greatly appreciated.

    http://playstopgo.com/temp/ForePlay.mp3

    Thanks in advance!
     
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  3. One Reason

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    Actually, I love it... very Kylie Minogue...with a bit of old school Berlin.. levels are great... only criticism from me, is the beginning is a bit.. abrupt?

    are you the singer, or you produced this?

    very addictive groove. wonderful , clear, in tune vocals.

    Impressive. Listened 3 times. This is going on my Ipod. Great title too. :wink: :grooves:

    Check my video, when u get a chance.. always looking for feedback too.

    :thumbsup:
     
  4. G String

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    she sounds cute ;)

    Not quite my thing, but it certainly sounds skilfully done.

    Good luck
     
  5. mrcaze

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    Excellent track!
    The only thing that bothered me is the place in breakdown, where claps and hihats drop in and where she sings "Way too many people...". It seems that the percussion track with claps and hihats is bandpassed and sent through reverb, which sounds a bit odd. If you want claps and hihats to be heard when they kick in, then I'd suggest to lowpass rather than bandpass. However, if I was doing it, then I'd probably do a track volume automation in order to quietly bring it in the mix.
     
  6. incognito

    incognito Noisemaker

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    Thank you guys! Those were very constructive comments.
    One Reason: Wow, I'm glad it made it to your Ipod! :) Send me your email I'll send you the finished version. To answer your question, I'm the producer. I checked your video and I posted my comments. Good job!
    G String: Thank you! I love your avatar :)
    MrCaze: Interesting point. I'm going to the studio in a couple days I'll see if I can make it sound better. I chose a filter instead of volume automation because it sounded a little empty to me. I'll play with it though to see what makes me happy.

    Thank you again guys. Good karma is coming your way! :)
     
  7. zspin.stomp.shuffle

    zspin.stomp.shuffle Newbie

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    nice. how did u get the vocals? nice voice.
     
  8. incognito

    incognito Noisemaker

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    I posted an ad on craigslist. You can find great local talents if you look hard enough :)


     
  9. PaulEsse

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    Good job man....I like the melody and the voice.
    You have to introduce us the singer !!!
    :wink:
     
  10. incognito

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    I will, I promise! One week from now.

     
  11. One Reason

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    Yup, bring on a video *yes*
     
  12. zspin.stomp.shuffle

    zspin.stomp.shuffle Newbie

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    would like that acapella actually it's very good.
     
  13. Rolma

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    Guah :grooves:
    First song?
    highly skilled!!!!
     
  14. Duu

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    incognito....Nice work, she's a lovely voice well suited to the tune most defo.....She's got one of those haunting thought provoking voices....Well produced, I forgot I was critically listening after a minute or so lol!!!!!.Well done- I'd like the finished one too?????
     
  15. incognito

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    Thank you guys. I will post the finished track soon. I'm mixing it this week and then sending it off for mastering. Shouldn't take long.
     
  16. zspin.stomp.shuffle

    zspin.stomp.shuffle Newbie

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    can i just suggest to you instead of pure synth bass use a real bass sound on the offbeat (3) and also i'm starting a label in 2012 so please keep at it incognito.
     
  17. incognito

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    Thanks, I'll try it. And I'm planning to keep at it! :)
     
  18. zspin.stomp.shuffle

    zspin.stomp.shuffle Newbie

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    good :mates:

    sound wikid
     
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    I love that voice, fits it nicely, kinda reminds me of Iio. The beginning does sound too soon, my only other thought is maybe adding a little more bass on the kick, maybe its just me :dunno:
     
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    Good mix man a very synthetic bass end kinda like electro house. If u like it I like it..I like what u did with the vocals i can't even do that myself. I just feel that saw like octave up and down is too loud and clashes with the voice in a similar range. use it more selectively and yeah turn it down more you'll get there mate.
     
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    Hi, I cant get the player to play the song, just keeps hanging. Will try again soon.
     
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