First Track made Public Since Last 5 years

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  1. gompo

    gompo Ultrasonic

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    Hi All,

    I have been producing since 5 years from Now and this is my first track which I decided to make public.
    Also, this is my first techno kinda track, Please do listen and provide me the feedback so that I can try to improve my self.



    https://soundcloud.com/girriado/moment-2

    Any advice or suggestion is really appreciated.


    Aditya
     
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  3. Peter Krav

    Peter Krav Producer

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    The intro is ok for a trance track but for 4 min track it's too long. Something is missing, add some elements (leads) because the arrangement is boring and too flat.Too much low end the kick can't stand out in the mix. I don't know much about techno but my opinion is: more elements leads pads and fx and (trance arrangement) it could be a nice trance track.Keep it up!
     
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  4. stoiximan

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    The whole track is just an intro.Nice intro but needs more work to take it further
     
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  5. rudolph

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    Maybe you should work 5 more years...
     
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    On principle, a nice track. I like the very low bass below the bass drum (maybe the others didn't get that), but concerning the arragement the others are right. With the part starting at ~ 2mins you should introduce a synth melody alternating with a pad and then have them both together for the final climax.
     
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  7. Kinghtsurfer

    Kinghtsurfer Audiosexual

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    Congrats for your first public release...

    The basic groove/ loop is good but the track needs much more music to be written for it to become a full song.

    Hope to hear more from you. :)
     
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  8. gompo

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    I listened to one tech house or Berlin house track, I liked it a lot and tried to produce something in that line, so here is the track.

    thanks for the feedback, well there are many tracks I have produced like the way you have addressed, expected one this friday. thanks again for for your time. :)
     
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    thanks stoixi, really I am completely unaware of this genre, just tried to make a track with more groove and lower ends.
    hope you will like my next tech house track.
     
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    hahah, that's cool.
     
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    thanks bro, will try to capture your advice in the next tech house track.
    btw do you want the stems for this track, Incase you wanna add something?
     
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    Thanks Kinghtsurfer, will surely take your advice up in my next production.
    Well there are 40+ songs of mine mainly progressive, chill and future stuff. This once is the only in its genre, so there might me many issues as addressed by you. Will surely try to come over it in my next release.
    Yes next release this friday.
     
  13. Magic Mango

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    I like this one a lot, although usually techno is too hard for me. I agree that the track is kinda uneventful and may seem monotonous, but I dig the constant tension and a feel of space travel. It might open a portal to another dimension mixed in well at a club :) So yeah, good sound, interesting style, solid filtering. Maybe somewhat repetitive but overall a hypnotic build and modern approach. Looking forward for the next one!
     
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    well for me its just a 4 minute loop of repeating sounds, nothing in here to call a track,( yet ) needs more, much more, its ok as some said for a 4 bar intro, work on it add elements, techno is pretty easy, just get a hook going, drop stuff out here and there, but its not a track, sorry just my 2 cents worth
     
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    Ha, ha, that's nice, thank you :wink:. I already thought about it, but I haven't produced techno for quite some time, but I will let you know, if I change my mind.
    I wonder, if you have already produced a lot of stuff in the techno genre, aren't you experienced with writing melodies?
     
  16. stoiximan

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    Sure friend i will be here to listen,but dont leave this song ,try to finish it because it has potential to be great
     
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    Thanks bro, the bass and its transactions is the only element in the song. Glad you get towards it. :)
     
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    Thanks bro, will try to take 2 bucks from you for my next track. :)
     
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    Hi bro, I can write melodies, but yes this is my first Techno kinda track. So I dont know where and how, which element to use.
     
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    Thanks again Stoixi, I will surely try to make it more musical rather than a loop. But really techno is not what I am up to. Still will try to do something more. In case you want the stems then please let me know. :)
     
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    I'm with @Magic Mango, I like..........and I could like more with a bit more tasteful work..............just now it sounds like the bare bones of a Chem Bros track, dress it up a bit an' it could be a goodie.
     
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