Hello,

got another track, that is unfinished. But i like it and may it's more processed then other unfinished tracks i made. There is only one soft compressor at the master track. At the beginnig i had a 4/4 Beat but effected it a lot so the 2nd beat is now the main beat. I'll add another Beat. The Bass and some other elements where made fast because i wanted to know how the idea sounds more complete. The main part or idea are these slightly different guitarparts. In an earlier state it reminded me to some trance tunes made in the early 90s.

I think as mostly this track is missing a main melody. Don't think so too? If so, which instrument should play this melody - i think a less effected guitar would make it.

If you want to jam over it - it's 129 bpm and the keynote is E minor.

http://soundcloud.com/otto-auch/bunte-voegel

Constructive criticism is welcome.

Thanks in advance.

Greets,
Jack

 

hi!

i really enjoyed it, i like ambient music, and this had some great atmosphere, i like the soundscape you set up in the intro..

i think around 2:33 a secondary melody would mix in well, although it is really nice as is..you will just get a higher level of complexity if you add a second melody in, so it might be worth it to experiment!

looking forward to see what you decide to do to the track!

thanks for sharing!

 

Hello,

thanks for listening and your feedback.

So you wouldn't miss a second melody?

Ok i made an update:

Changed beat's volume (may it lost the ambient touch now - but i still like it), added a new cheesy melody and changed some parts of the arrangement. And i tried to make a better mix - pushed up the quietly elements and added some more fades. Oh and this time there is really a compressor at the mastertrack (before there was only a limiter).

http://soundcloud.com/otto-auch/bunte-voegel-extended-mix

Greets,
Jack