The overhaul is a good improvement. I'd be careful not to kill the song with too many edits and adjustments and changes. It's songs like these that prove that people still make excellent music. To me creativity means a lot more than a super polished track that sounds good on a teen girl's smartphone. Keep creating!

 

Man, the energy balance is so much better!

I see you switched up the break, I actually think the previous break is stronger than the one you replaced it with. To me the previous break sounds like it fits the track better, also something about the snare on the new break sounds off.

At 1:50 the filtered break feels like it comes in a bit too early, you could let the vocal sit another 8 bars before bringing in the break at 2:01 with a lp filter sweep that builds for 7 bars before you bring it in fully at the drop at 2:12.

Alternatively, you could replace the break at 2:01 with the hihat loop youre using in the second breakdown, then bring your kick in 4 bars and use it to build more tension with a 2/4/8/16 pattern build before the drop.

I would also consider removing the 16 bars from 2:56 to 3:18, it gets a bit too repetitive here, and instead bring that second break down in at 2:56. Because the track is already very vocal heavy, after the second breakdown, I would lose the main vocals, but keep the background chorus vocals just to start winding the energy down. I would consider losing the last 30 seconds of the track, ending the track within 32 bars from when the drop comes in after the second breakdown.

Again, these are just suggestions and definitely do what you feel sounds best to you. But have to say it flows so much nicer just from the tweaks youve already made.

 

Last edited: Sep 10, 2025

Nice vibe. The vocal sounds familiar, who's singing? Jorja Smith?

 

The overhauled track sounds so crisp. You did a good job! The new snare especially fits so much better with the style.
Now you can make it louder. The standard-ish loudness for this kind of music is -5 to -4 LUFS at the loudest part, from my observations.
Also you can probably return some of the low mids you've tut from the vocals, they now sound a bit thin.