comments and suggestions greatly appreciated.
thx

 

Ciao...mi piace anche troppo corto il pezzo.. avrei aggiunto una voce..e poi mi ha fatto pensare alla mia musica

 

thanks. I wish I had a voice... (other than my own...)

 

hai qualcosa da sentire?

 

io uso bank voices o allora una voce amica o una voce presa sul vivo come qua >>

 

hi,
heres one I did yesterday:

 

Yo @droplet ... This one is pretty cool... Sounds like an abstract ambient track... Like a background score to a dystopian scene...

 

we live in dystopia. so I guess for me it's normal.

Thanks a lot for your encouragement.

 

maybe you confused my track with Maskar3's track?
his stuff is very nice, if you haven't listened to him check him out.

 

Nice work! I wish I could be at your level.. While I learned music for about a year from a traditional pro, who toured with his band in the 70's and got famous & successful, I unfortunately had to turn my career into doing visual creative arts.
So you are getting a LISTENERs feedback.
I mainly use music to "paint music", while listening to it. In the middle-ages it was customary for music teachers that they also taught painting. Both creative arts use the same brain areas.
So your track is okay for a background / ambient / support: imagine your musician friend walking into your studio and hears your track. While your track is playing he/she immediately sits down to the synthesizer and begins playing a melody selecting a really nice patch. So you need a key/lead synth sound to create a melody here. This track resembles those automated workstations, like what a Yamaha Tyros gives you. On that one you can start a rumba or salsa basic track and you have to join in on the keyboard to play a melody.

Unfortunately, melodies are the hardest to create in music, as a pleasant melody it has to tell a story:
Junkie XL uses this same method, but his melodies are near-junk, only good for background tracks, but he creates amazing tutorials and hardware demo videos. So here is an excellent one:
https://www.masterclass.com/classes/hans-zimmer-teaches-film-scoring
OR
Demonstrated real-time, by a pro, jumping right into what matters, what I wanted to convey:

 

thanks a lot for you comments and your time.

It took me about 5 hours to get the track where it is...too soon really to post it, but I thought I'd take the chance as all my stuff are works in progress.
If you want just keep working on your music and studying. it's a natural process. thanks to your and the others comments I'm lucky enough to get your ideas on how to improve.

 

Great one the only thing i can say is make the snare sit better in the mix. to me it sounds isolated i don't know why, mabe add a bit of reverb ?
and cut that base a bit short right at the end
other than those little things it is all good
best of luck

 

Thanks al lot I keep your suggestions in mind for the next one!