I haven’t finished it yet but i think i have something good.Tell what you think of it

Lyrics

You are mine
I want you
You are mine
I need you

I am going to get you
No matter were you go
No matter were you hide
I am going to get you

You cannot hide from me
I am Unstoppable
I am going to get you
No matter were you go
No matter what you do
I am going to get you

You cannot hide from me
I want that smile

 

Are you a Depeche Mode fan ?
(Sounds heavily inspired by them)

 

At 1:08 the Arp is a bit to loud in my opinion (about 3-4 db less would be better)(and/or maybe a little of side chaining for the Vocals would be good )
I understand that it have to be a main element but it's bit to prominent.
(Problem is Vocals are great, but at this point they hide behind the arp )

 

good stuff.

no matter how "depeche mode" it (could) sound, I like that you stay in your range and express feeling.

I'd really like members who share songs and beats to tell us more about the "how's and why's" they do stuff : what the song is about, on a technical level, what is the gear they use and how they mixed the whole stuff ( FX chains, FX, etc... )

I could comment on what I think is missing, what you should add, but I think it only gets constructive once everything is explained from a creator POV.

nice job, keep going

 

You are right i also would like people to share the ways they do music.About my song i can tell you this,its a love song with a dark twist made in Renoise the best tracker.Its really a very simple track,vocals recorded in one take but felt good and kept them.As i said i haven't finished it yet and maybe down the line i could make a small video about it.In Renoise we use the pc keyboard to enter notes,i really dont use my midi controller anymore,so just Renoise and vps avenger-serum,Massive x,LittleOne - Xhun..

 

Thanks you for the tips and for taking the time to listen

 

Arent we all funs of them?Thanks for listening

 

This is a song about me and my glasses....
--i agree with Polomo that the Arp or sequence is too loud, or, in my opinion, at the wrong part of the spectrum, near the frequency range of your voice. I would try to use another sound in the middle part, say, like a simple triangle or so, two oct higher.

I mean no offense, but the words are, or the possible context as I'm interpreting it, sounds kind of stalker-ish to me.
When I read "I am going to get you" I want to change the "get" to "let".
Because after a breakup the only solution is to let go.

 

Thanks for the tips and for taking the time to listen.As for the song its a love song with a dark twist thats why i feel the lyrics are appropriate

 

Holy shit i love it!
The style, the "mood", the flow…. realy dark and melancholy! Special music and a special voice.
…. i really would like to make some kind of a Deep-Dub_Tek-Remix (using your vocals)

 

Very cool, I like how the listener can't completely tell if this is spooky or edgy AF.

 

As much as I like stoiximans voice and singing, thinking about the whole music piece as very "Nikita"-resq (as in the 90's TV series with Peta Wilson an d Roy Dupuis) in a total positive way, as much I find the text "late adolescent" (dict.cc translated for German "spätpubertär" or immature), tbh.
But, in said TV show this would be a text for someone (mentally ?) disturbed, who is obsessed with following someone who rejected him or fled from him. I can literally see the the scenes that are accompanied by this song. The series had this mood frequently.
If something like that was stoixmans intention, then well done

 

Love this song @stoiximan ... great work... love the whole build up and the lyrics also work very well... the vocal performace is pretty kick ass...

My only 2 suggestions -

When the beat kicks in, the vocal gets a wee bit behind the music... so, perhaps make it more audible. You could also sidechain a compressor on the arps to the vocals so it moves out of the way when the vocals are being sung.

The reverb on the vox could also have a sidechained compressor to improve clarity and presence of the voice and words.

Awesome work! Loved it!

 

Thank you all for your kind words and tips.The vocals recorded in one take and I haven't mixed the track.I don't know Jack shit about mixing
anyway.I plan to improve it but at this time there is a lot going on in my life so........Thanks again

 

This song goes both ways.One way is the stalker and the other just someone who really wants someone else.Thanks for the feedback

 

Thanks for you kind words and tips.

 

Yes that is awesome.I recorded it in one take and when I listened back I felt the same.Thanks for your kind words

 

Sure I am open for any collaboration.Hit me on Facebook or pm here.

https://m.facebook.com/panos.kostagiannis?ref=bookmarks

 

Loved the series when I was young. Peta was hot.
But back to the song. I think what @Polomo said was right about the vocals. It's a nice song (I'm no expert in this genre) but vocals are hidden behind the whole melody. And I can understand that as the creator you might want this to be clearly heard. Also agree with side chaining vocals. Add to that a bit more of differentiation between verses and it could be great.
Χρειάζεται λίγο μάζεμα αδερφέ. Με λίγη δουλίτσα νομίζω θα είναι τέλειο. Ειδικά Ελλάδα που παίζει πολύ αυτό το είδος (είτε από άτομα που το γνωρίζουν , είτε από άσχετους που το ακούνε στα μπιτσόμπαρα και γουστάρουν ) είναι δυνατό κομάτι. Κάτι ψιλολόγια θέλει για να γίνει παραγωγή επιπέδου εξωτερικού. Ηδη είναι σε πολύ καλό επίπεδο

 

Νασαι καλα φιλαρακι ευχαριστω για τα tips.