as you guys have been giving me good feedback i've to share this one with ya'all.

peace love & positivity.



the original one was a bit long. this one is trimmed. what do you think should i trim it more ?

 

The melody sounds like someone banging the piano during a heavy ether binge; there are numerous fx but zero cohesion with the rest of the track; the pluck is too loud and dry sounding; that cool acid stab at the end of the intro is completely wasted; there seems to be no bass to get the track moving and no pad to fill the background. Congratulations, you have put into music what it's like to go to church.

 

Last edited: Sep 6, 2019

i don't have good headphones so i often get the no bass stuff. but I'll do it for sure. he he yeah it's a bit dry than usual. plus I'm an atheist.

 

The arpeggios in both parts sound like 80s synthwave while the drums sound like (bad) techno in both parts, especially the kick is way to hard – aestehtic mismatch, imo. There are some elements missing to hold it all together like chords or an actual bassline. I'd try different drums.

 

yup i used some bad snares then i left it there. but good drums in next song for sure.

 

You should not be producing on headphones anyway, I only do it at night when neighbours "require" sleep and it's mostly sound design. You can't hear the true impulse of the low-end on headphones except on maybe some very high-end headphone monitors and in-ear monitors. It's a must to produce on monitor speakers, they don't have to be expensive either, I mix and master on Microlab Solo 8c's (fucking cheap chinese floor speakers) and Cakewalk MA-15D's (positively not even close to good monitors, very very on budgety side). If you have the money, get some speakers man, and more importantly learn to criticize your music, most beginners think everything they touch is hot shit but its actually just shit.