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I like the sounds and the vibe.

but, the structure...

This gives me the feeling of a series of "U turns". Nothing wrong with that but I think you should consider these "pointers" next time you write something in this spirit:

- If you choose to use a previous part as a basis for what is coming next, make sure it is presented in a different way that builds up excitement or intensity. Double instruments if you want, add rhythmic elements, change key, whatever.. as long as it doesn't feel like we're just revisiting the same exact "lower intensity" part from before.

- In case you're into including those parts "as heard before", you could add a different section with higher intensity to propel the music and only after that you come back to those old parts. That makes the song feel like it went somewhere before the "revisit" part.

These are my thoughts regarding the way you present your material and the length of the whole piece.

Just my cent.

 

Thank you for your kind wishes, Kouros! Live and learn!