hello new song in progress what do you think ?

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    Hi @SmokerNzt :bow:
    I like it,interesting intro for sure,nice transition to the main part on the track :keys: :speaker:,excellent & creative visuals btw.
    Thanks for sharing! :wink: :bow:

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    imho,a different vision/version of this could benefit with a stronger melodic part.
    I used to listen to a lot of Astral Projection & Dragonfly records in the past,those where some great days,cheers!
     
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    ty mate !
     
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    I like it! What did you use to create the animation and graphics?
     
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    A.I and CapCut Effect
     
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    It's a bit scrappy, it starts weakly. gets stronger at 1min in when drums kick in, shitty snare drum, kick works, could kick more though.

    I'd scrap the start and put that in as a drop later on and build the track around the later bit, start it with the acid arp, bring kick in, add an offbeat hat, then snare, find another snare, use 909, 606 or 808 for all your drums, introduce the other syth arp, at 32 bars, try dropping kick at bar 30, for two bars, then back in with the new synth part, build all that up over say 64 bars, then go into the drop.

    This new intro will grab folks attention more and they might stick around to the drop, you've gotta draw people in immediately, there's enough here to do that, but the clumsy structure is obscuring the tracks true worth.

    Try the offbeat hat first, then kick, wotever works best, it could do with some more elements, but there's enough there to produce something far more satisfying than your first arrangement/structure.

    It's ok, but ok ain't gonna get you anywhere, ok.

    You need to improve in a few areas so start to understand your strengths and weaknesses... it'll come...
     
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    the track still in progress but ty for the tips :)
     
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