I love the music and lyrics!

If I had to get microscopic with criticism I would say the mix/master could be sweetened a bit if this song is to stand out. If this is something that would be sent to a mix/mastering engineer then nevermind

 

Its nauseously soft. it needs some balls.
More like this:

 

i like the music, and i would love to work on it, as long as you send the multitracks and not the stems.

 

Pro work man congrats!!

 

Write a song for me.

 

Doo dee doo daa daa daaaawwwww ana na na na.

pay me.

 

LOL

 

thank you

 

It is interesting pop work. It's good enough to get you stuck in. Make a tic-toc contest for 12 year old girls to sing your song and dance or whatever and share it for a chance to win one of the new Apple watches.

You buy one watch for 300 bcuks you spread your song and you have material to make a youtube video.

If it takes off it takes off, if it doesn't you haven't really lost much and you now have some exposure.

 

VERY nice, its fun to see lately how so many well produced tracks are here asking for feedback.
again, very nice vocals and overall production!

and because of that fact, the critique gets automatically so much more demanding since you are competing in a superior level of production, what probably can sound finished and "perfect" to many ears does instead lack the very last details for transforming this "pro-demo" or well produced average track to a potentially well selling product

those areas are, the mixing of the vocals and arrangement of the instrumental track.
both need the treatment of a seasoned producer and engineer, because they are so good so my guess you have taken it as far as you can.

now, beware im not saying this cant or shouldn't be released!!
its impossible for me to say, i dont have a clue of what your immediate goal is, if you see this track as one more step in your development its great work

but if you have already being at this stage for a while producing pro/semi-pro stuff without getting any further imho you really need to incorporate people with that extra knowledge to make an effective arrangement, basically adding an instrumental chorus that actually does something for the track, as now its a total anticlimax.

 

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Are you trying to turn young teenagers into plastic fantastic minions with a gay accent?

 

Nice cover/remix, you have your style.

 

Love it... Well done!