I made this mostly on my seinheisser 25ii's.. If someone has really good speakers and a good ear do you mind listening and giving me specific feedback and I can go back into my mix..

 

Ditch the first 30 secs of the song and start with just synths,slowly build on it.
From 30secs on its good,after 1:10 it gets boring again.Build on on that first part,as later it has little or no personality.
Since you dont have a vocalist add a synth melody which you can later replace with real vocals.
Try to keep the listeners attention,if its only ok for you its only mediocre for the listener,but if you write a song that can make you say "i love it" after listening to it 500x times,then you know you`ve got something.
Sound wise its better than your first mix i listened to.

 

Thanks I was looking for that kind of input.

 

No problem

 

Not too bad for a DJ who taught himself everything ;) I need to go back into the project and this is far from done it looks like . I hand write my own melodies I don't use loops so this will take awhile.